pull down to refresh
110 sats \ 2 replies \ @Scoresby 11h \ on: "Tokemon" (chapter draft) BooksAndArticles
I enjoyed it. Feels a little like the opening to Electric Sheep, so you've got a lot going for it.
If anything, Jack is too "enlightened." I think if the story is going to begin at this advanced stage (where society has crumbled so far) I want to see Jack's struggle to became aware of how bad it is, not necessarily his struggle to resist it. You know where you want to take it, but I have a hard time believing someone like Jack -- who can navigate the underground and has silver and gold stashes -- letting himself get into this position. And if he gets in this position, what I'm most curious about is how he got here without trying to use his bitcoin -- that is really intriguing.
I hope I don't offend you by being forward with my thoughts here, but I got the sense that you'd like some feedback.
I'm curious to see where you take it.
Appreciate the feedback. And thanks for the comparison. PKD's someone I aspire too. Not the paranoia though.
"Enlightened."
Good note. Was going for the guy who buys the stuff but never learned how to use it. Underground by necessity. Like upstanding Argentinians buying USD off black markets. But agree, could use some buffing.
bitcoin
Yeah, exploring that. Keeps it interesting. Have 15 chapters mapped. Really feeling it. Wanted to see how it tested.
offend
None taken. Helpful feedback, thanks!