Spent an inordinate amount of time marking two students’ compositions, so I want to lock in the key learning takeaways I scribbled on their essays.
- pair a said verb with a mention of the eyes
“Mum, could you buy this for me, please?” I pleaded, my eyes sparkling with anticipation.
- use personification
Imagine inanimate objects as personalities and make them do something
Endorphins surged through me like a wave of pure joy!
Guilt, as hard as stone, lodged in my chest.
- explore the impact of a character’s actions on another character
I stole a glance at her fierce glare and shuddered, a shiver running down my spine.
- link the story to address the theme
Although my mother gracionsy forgave me, I still had to make amends for my mistake. I scrimped and saved from my pocket money to buy her a replacement tablet. It was a painful process but I did it willingly because I wanted to be responsible and own up to my mistake.
My mother had to compensate the store for the broken tablet. Consequently, I saved up my pocket money to repay her. It was an excruciating process, but I had no choice but to face the music and take responsibility for my mistake.
I did find it quite fun to write comments that were tailored to each individual’s language aptitude and competency.