Wrote these sentences to elevate my fourth graders’ writing. Make of them what you will. Haha
An Accident
- I savoured every moment as a broad grin spread across my face.
- His heart soared and he walked with a spring in his step.
- She noticed the old man's plight. With a concerned look on her face, a passer-by took out her phone and dialled for an ambulance.
- Her face lit up with delight.
- Thud! a branch fell onto the ground.
- The old man toppled over instantly. He looked pallid and petrified. Blood dripped down his forehead.
- He winced in pain, tears welling up in his eyes. The pain was unbearable. His eyes widened with dismay.
- A sharp pain shot through her foot. It overwhelmed her so much that tears welled up in her eyes.
- He clutched his head in pain, tears welling up in his eyes. He was paralysed with intense fear.
- A look of horror crossed his face.
- The paramedics focused on their work, looks of determination etched on their faces.
- He heaved a sigh of relief.
- The two passers-by who had helped the man looked worried, with their eyebrows furrowed.
- The family members sobbed uncontrollably.
- In the end, the man recuperated from his injuries. He would still cringe in horror whenever he recounted the incident. He resolved to be more cautious in the future.
- The man was hospitalised for several days. Luckily, his injuries were not severe. My mother took me to the hospital to thank him. Gratitude flooded through me as I thanked him profusely. I was lucky to have met a kind Samaritan.
- Thankfully, the man was not severely injured. He learnt to be extra cautious in the future.
- Their eyebrows were knitted with concern. / They had looks of concern on their faces.
- She lowered her head in remorse and bit her lip.
- He hung his head in mortification.
- I resolved to be more mindful of my surroundings.
- They resolved not to play dangerous pranks in the future.
- I prayed fervently that the man would be all right.
- He groaned in agony while passers-by stood there frozen in shock.
- The man was taken to the hospital. Mia and I fervently hoped that he would be all right.
- Curiosity filled her mind.