0 sats \ 0 replies \ @itsrealfake 28 May \ on: The Final Product, Chapter 33 BooksAndArticles
This is the first I've read of it. interesting scene. Neat idea to have an unalien island.
Here's my notes:
When Jane entered Franklin’s cell,
She stopped short of stepping into the cell.
Wait, what?
The lengthy emotional journeys they had traveled left them in lands that were foreign to each other, and without connection. But it seems that even language was capable of sending up some signal flare to bring them back together.
okay cool, but can it be said in a different way? the tenses switch between past & present ('they had traveled' v. 'but it seems') & the words land like sandbags:
"Having traveled so far in separate directions, they inhabited foreign places. shared emotional blahblah was their signal flare, impossible to ignore drawing them closer."
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