And then I peppered in personal details from my unique lived experience so I’d really care about the story.
Stopped reading after that. Maybe it's just your writing style, but the way you wrote this does not sound like you "really care about the story," not even after you "peppered in personal details."
Stopped reading after that. Maybe it's just your writing style, but the way you wrote this does not sound like you "really care about the story," not even after you "peppered in personal details."