0 sats \ 7 replies \ @TNStacker 10 Apr \ parent \ on: Work-in-progress of my guide on financial sovereignty with Bitcoin. bitcoin_beginners
Your intro starts with a very fine what, but one must read paragraphs before the why is covered. You may find many, especially those younger than 40 will need read far enough for the why. I read, write, and edit in my work and you had to point it out to me. If you are pointing things out after the fact, consider edits.
Cover the why earlier in your intro.
I have spoken.
Hm. I'll put some further thought towards the structuring, but honestly?
If a few minutes is already too long to get from the detailed "what" to the detailed "why", then it might not be the guide for you.
I'm not saying you're wrong, I simply don't see a way of improving the above as of now, and I kinda fail to see the bigger "why".
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The answer to why is who. Who is your audience?
All writers disagree with editors. All writers need editors.
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you're fine for a more intermediate or advanced beginner. They already know the why, so my point is invalid there.
When I say clear and concise I mean for a wider audience. Adding a couple of why statements earlier on opens up the content to some who will stop at paragraph one or two.
Hope you found the discussion helpful.
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Of course!
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